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More and more people buy a wide range of household goods like television, microwave oven and rice cooker. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, more and more householders consume va
riety o
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a variety
f
household
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 goods like television, microwave
oven
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 and
rice
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cooker
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. In my opinion,
this
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 is an advanced movement in modern
life
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, not only benefit for consumers in general, but
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 making great profits for business
in particular
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.
First
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, from us
er perspective,
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a user perspective
the user perspective
electrical equipment
such
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 as microwave
oven
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 and
rice
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cooker
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 significantly assist consumers to perform their daily tasks faster and mo
re convenience.
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more convenient
more conveniently
So that, they can spend more time with their family to build pr
ofound connection w
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a profound connection
ithin family members, which is more important than wasting time in kitchen for unnecessary activities due to old and inconvenience equipment.
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 that, due to the fast past of
life
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, people are fully occupied by works and tend to eat fast and unhealthy meals like fast foods to save time. Microwave
oven
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 and
rice
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cooker
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 is
t
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are
he eminent solution for
this
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 issue because people now able to straightforward cook and enjoy delicious meals at home without suffering long and hard cooking process.
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, from en
terprise perspective,
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an enterprise perspective
developing
household
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 goods like television, microwave
oven
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 and
rice
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cooker
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 has established a potential and profitable market. Thanks to en
ormous demand o
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the enormous demand
f those
household
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 goods, more factories have been opened and operated, resulted in tackling unemployment problem and encouraging development of relative industries like electric, semi-conductor, and other material productions.
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, good business will contribute more taxed mo
ney which c
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money, which
an use to enhance the quality of
life
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 by building more hospitals, school, infrastructure and to support citizens around. In conclusion, the development of using
household
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 goods has no
table contribution i
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a notable contribution
n modern
life
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, benefit for both consumers and ma
nufactures a
a business engaged in manufacturing some product
manufacturers
s mentioned above.
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