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International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while other s do not. What are your opinion on this?

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In modern
society traveling
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society, travelling
society travelling
 abroad become more popular. Some people believe that it has advantages,
however
, others do not.
This
 essay agrees that it is a negative trend because it will lead to a lack of domestic
tourism
 and economic disadvantages. Local
tourism
 could have a negative impact because of the shortage of tourists. Some people claim that international journeys attract more visitors and if
this
 phenomenon will be promoted more, domestic journeys can be disappeared. Potential tourists would like to discover
different unusual
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different, unusual
 places for themselves, that's why they have the motivation to go to overseas destinations. A recent study found that It is widely believed that international trips do not positively influence the economy of the tourists' country of residence. It is true that for visiting
abroad we
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abroad, we
 should have some fundings to cover our stay in a new temporary region.
Moreover
, a lot of
place
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places
 for visiting is very expensive.
This
 finance will be moved out of the state treasury. Research shows that tourists spend at least 1,500 US dollars for a one week period of their trip abroad.
On the other hand
, moving to other countries can
give a chance us
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give us a chance
 to learn more about new cultures.
Furthermore
, a
traveler
a person who changes location
traveller
 can have access to various resources that he or she does not have in his native countries,
such
 as oceans and mountains. Another good choice for oversea
tourism
 is that we can find new friends. In conclusion, global
tourism
 can be a reason for at least 2 disadvantages,
such
 as negative effects on domestic
tourism
 and in a bad financial situation in the living country of tourists. We should
also
 take into consideration that discovering oversea places can teach us about different cultures, we can meet new friends and enjoy nature that we don't have.
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