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The major cities in the world are growing fast, as well as their problems. What are the problems that people living in cities are facing with? Give solutions to these problems

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Major metropolises around the world are experiencing exponential growth.
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 essay outlines some of the major issues
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 causes for younger members of society and some ways to address them. Rapidly growing cities cause two major issues for young people. The most serious is the difficulty youths face to get employed in the competitive job market of a growing city.
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 is because of age discrimination in the labour market based on the perception that young people are less competent workers. The
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 problem is the feeling of alienation. As the population increases, people tend to be less familiar with people in their community, and young people
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 often lack an established social network and start to feel isolated from society.
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, there are some ways to alleviate these problems.
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, the government can provide subsidies to companies that are willing to hire young people. These subsidies will make it more attractive for companies to hire young people and
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 will allow them to get experience so that they will be more employable in the future. With regard to alienation, the best way to deal with
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 is to have grassroots community organisations that reach out and help young people. An effective way to do
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 is to have public service advertising for these types of organisations on social media platforms that young people often engage in. In conclusion, megalopolises are negatively impacting the youths in many countries around the world by making it extremely difficult for them to get jobs and by often causing feelings of social isolation. The best ways to tackle these problems are for the government to provide policies aimed at assisting youths to gain employment and for community organisations to help provide a support network for at-risk individuals.

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