Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy in life? What other things in life can make people happy?

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It is often thoughts by some people that being wealthy is the major source of happiness in life. In my view, I believe other factors
such
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as having good health and families are
also
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responsible for a feeling of satisfaction. Being financially buoyant affords a
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man
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man's
life basic needs and much more luxurious amenities
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as good cars, houses, food and clothing.
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, It
boost
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boosts
man
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's
ego which
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ego, which
as a result
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make him feel happy. It
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also enable
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also enables
him to help the less privileged in the society which in turn makes him influential in the society.
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, having a feeling of contentment. Admittedly, richness despite being a source of happiness, other factors
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as having good health and a good family are
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responsible for our state of joy. Good health cannot be purchased. There are several wealthy people who are not happy because they are sick.
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, a wealthy
man
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who
had cancer having spent
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was cancer spent
had cancer having spent
so much yet didn't get better at the point of death said "shame to money." Another point to consider is having a good family. Many homes have broken
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of barrenness.
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, I know a couple who is so rich and have spent so much in order to have their own biological children without any positive result. In conclusion, even though being wealthy makes one happy, it is not the only factor
that is
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responsible for a
man
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's sense of
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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