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People tend to work longer hours nowadays. Working long hours has a negative effect on themselves their families and the society so working hours should be restricted. Do you agree or disagree?

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The essay illustrates the view based on working hours and its effects. NOW-A-DAYS people are working for longer hours because of the
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 pressure and load they are having on their back from the higher authorities. I totally agree with the topic which was
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 now. The longer we
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 the weaker we become.
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 is the fact everyone knows. Working for a long time detaching the people from society and family and the impact is too high.
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, people are facing the health issues, stress, depression what not!. Positivity is decreasing day by day in the people and negativity had been increasing more due to the
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 load on them. People themselves have to take an action and make them as flexible for the working hours so that their connection to the family will be as before and it would not get
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having the place or position changed
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. Even, Government should take some precautions on the working hours people are having and take all the possibility measures. I conclude smart
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 is more important than hard
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 and
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 having a healthy relationship plays a significant role in every individual life.
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