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Today it is common practice for many business meeting and business training to take place online. Do the advantage of this new development outweigh the disadvantages.

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Telephone conferencing nowadays is a common scenario which is mostly useful for the business purpose. In current days, majority of meetings and business training are being done through online system known as a virtual
work
 culture.
This
 new development provides numerous benefits to the business as it can
also
 have some drawbacks which will be explained in
upcoming paragraphs
Suggestion
the upcoming paragraphs
. To embark with, doing conferencing is
effective tool
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an effective tool
 in the field of
work
 culture. The primary major factor is that it helps to
work
 together as like
team
objective case of they
them
 in any time anywhere. It does not matter whether staff members are present or not.
However
, online meeting as well as training are useful for those people who are not able
ro
in the direction of
to
 attend meeting personally by the helps of virtual system
although
 they attend their all meeting sitting at home.
For example
,
this
 new trend mostly is observed
ib
to or toward the inside of
in
 western countries appro6 60%
work
 is
doing
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done
 online.
Last
 but not the least,
this
 new development
also
 help to save the time and cut down all the expenses like transportation. Moving
further
 to
next
 point, there is
few
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little
 of the demerits of the online conference.
First
 and foremost is that
this
 new system can puts
bad impact
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a bad impact
 on the
tradition
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traditional
 style.
However
, sometimes
network
Suggestion
the network
 is not working properly as it
also
 creates problems. In conclusion,
traditional style
Suggestion
the traditional style
 is observed undergone the
see
a division of an ocean or a large body of salt water partially enclosed by land
sea
 change. Everything has
being
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
 changed according to
passage
Suggestion
the passage
 of time like working online. It gives ample number of benefits to both employees as well as for employers.

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