Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities should make it easier for such groups to enrol. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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education

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is known

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a crucial factor for the future perspective of a person.

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, nowadays each and every one try to gain

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task.

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, getting admission in a good

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seems to be challenging for the students who come from poor financial backgrounds and the country sides. In my view, I agree on

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due to some facts which I will discuss in

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, the higher

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charges are increasing

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a rapid speed in the today's world. In order to obtain a well recognized degree or diploma from a reputed institution a person has to invest a large sum of money as the

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fee. Unfortunately, the people live in rural areas do not have that kind of money with them more often than not.

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result these

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people end up with not attending a proper tertiary

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institute.

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most higher

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higher

educational institutions

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are built

the large

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larger

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cities than rural areas.

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, the students required to leave their houses to enrol these study programs. Due to the family background of these students they prefer not to consider

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option. Because they have to leave their parents and family to enter

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degree programs. Since these rural

families mostly

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families, mostly

get their income from farming, they could not afford to

loose

fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense

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the youth energy. In conclusion,

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in recent years

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education

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became a necessity for every person. In my opinion, still the people from country sides could not achieve

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goal because of their financial status and family responsibilities.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Equal opportunity
Diversity
Underrepresented groups
Financial constraints
Scholarships
Quota systems
Preparatory courses
Outreach programs
Academic standards
Tokenism
Reverse discrimination
Impoverished
Rural areas
Enrollment policies
Non-profit organizations

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Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities should make it easier for such groups to enrol. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In some cities public parks and open spaces are being changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetable. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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the type of media that people of differnt age groups used to get daily newsw in one country in 2011

Some people think that there's nothing we can learn from history previous characters,while on the other hand,some of them believe that there is a lot that we can learn from history,such as avoiding the mistakes that people before made. In this article, I will be discussing both views.

Some people think that manufacturers and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged products while others argue that people have the responsibility to buy products with less packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.