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world history suggests that violence and conflicts were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership. So ,for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership. To what extent you agree or disagree ?

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Introduction
Leadership is the biggest
resposibility
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
 and a role to play.A
leader
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 is the one who influences people for their do's and dont's, their moral duties, awakens them towards their fundamental rights.
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It's a
leader
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's responsibility to avert situations like riots, civil wars, fallen economy, look after national security and many more activities.
Body paragraph 2
So a
leader
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 should be calm mind
,
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,
who thinks
unbiasedly
in an unabashed manner
unabashedly
 on any situation
,
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,
more on they should take any decision in national benefit and world peace.
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In my opinion
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 and foremost, it hardly matters who is the commander either a male or a female, it's all about the person who is sitting on the throne who must have all the credibility
,
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,
proficiency and gentle nature
Body paragraph 4
to
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To
 handle the
world peace
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world, peace
 in a noble manner.There is a saying "great leaders make the country great"
Body paragraph 5
In the past, we have faced world war twice and we found there was
a
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an
atrocities
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atrocity
, genocide,
massarce
the common people generally
masses
message
 and yes at that time most of the leaders were male
.
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.
Body paragraph 6
On the
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contrary we
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contrary, we
also
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 have great leaders like Abraham Lincoln
,
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,
Mahatma Gandhi
,
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,
 Winston
Churchill who
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Churchill, who
 was against the war and their mentality leaning more towards global peace and non-violence.
Body paragraph 7
However
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, we don't have many examples of female leaders who indulged or the reason for any war like situations, the reason must be we have very less female leaders in the past.
Body paragraph 8
In conclusion, we cannot compare the ruler by their gender, they're Apples and oranges.
Conclusion
Furthermore
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 the quality and determination of the
leader
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 towards their duties
,
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,
roles and primarily to their citizens that matters indeed.

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