It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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The possible of
inhabitingthe
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inhabiting the
natural environment by scientists and tourists
createsboth
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creates both
advantages and disadvantages. It can save nature and the environment or create chaos by those who have done so without caution.In the South Pole, the ability to live
withthe
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with the
naturesuch
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nature, such
nature such
as polar bears
,
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,
would save them from being extinct as we all know the main reason causing
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isglobal
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is global
warming.
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This basically
is the
heatmelting
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heat melting
the ice
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;
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,
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,
destroyingtheir
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destroying their
place
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of living. The
scientist perhaps
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scientist, perhaps
can
transportthem
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transport them
to another
place
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that
suitstheir
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suits their
habitats and
movethem
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move them
back once they are breeding a lot in order to decrease their chance of extinction. Another
advantageis
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advantage is
perhaps the scientist can figure a way to create gigantic
iceglaciers
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ice glaciers
like those in the South Pole and
transportthem
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transport them
to a
place
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where the ice
hasalready
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has already
melted.Another benefit of
inhabitingthe
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inhabiting the
natural environment is to save the
AmazonRainforest
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Amazon Rainforest
that
hasbeen
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has been
on
firefor
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fire for
more than three weeks due to lack of farmer
ducation
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
,
selfishness
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the selfishness
of the population and inefficient
waysto
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ways to
handle the problem
by
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with
the government. The
farmersburn
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farmers burn
the forest down to create
landfor
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land for
farming. The people cut trees down
tosell
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to sell
. The government
lacksregulation
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to control and look
afterthe
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after the
forest etc. The
movingof
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moving of
the Amazon Rainforest to another
place
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which is
takencare
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taken care
by
organizersor
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organizers or
agentswho
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agents who
specialize in
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field
,
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,
would be the most efficient and fastest way to restore the forest and animal wildlife there.On the other hand, the disadvantage of
this
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development
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developing
mainly
comesfrom
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comes from
the disagreement of who and where to move to. If
this
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development can be done easily,
selfishpeople
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selfish people
might
movewildlife
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animalsto
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animals to
their own property or collection.Or
,
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,
there might be a disagreement between country and organization.
for
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For
example the Amazon Rainforest case. The Brazilian government might claim
its
it is
it's
their own property and not allow the land to be Inhabited. If
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problem
getsworse
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gets worse
,
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,
itcould
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it could
lead to war or chaos.In conclusion, in my opinion
,
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,
I believe it’s more
advantageousas
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advantageous as
we could save the world and create a better
place
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. If all of us really care and want the best for our world
,
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,
there would not be a disagreement that could lead to a big problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote natural environment
  • scientific research
  • climate change
  • environmental preservation
  • economic benefits
  • conservation efforts
  • habitat disruption
  • pollution
  • cultural disruption
  • indigenous populations
  • commercialization
  • safety risks
  • personal enrichment
  • ecosystems
  • awareness
  • appreciation for nature
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