IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

With internet improvements, people can share views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is this a good or a bad thing? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays
Punctuation problem
Nowadays,
show examples
 everyone is interested in sharing their personal
reviews
Use synonyms
 on the internet,
whatever
Correct word choice
whether
show examples
 they purchased goods,
hence
Linking Words
 it's
benefit
Replace the word
beneficial
show examples
 to the new buyers in many ways. I will argue
sharing
Correct word choice
that sharing
show examples
 views is how it will ultimately benefit
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the customer.
Firstly
Linking Words
,
Linking Words
Due
Fix capitalization
due
show examples
 to
globalization
Change the spelling
globalisation
show examples
, many products
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
 coming to market from different countries , but same time
no
Punctuation problem
, no
show examples
 one
saying
Wrong verb form
says
show examples
 what is good and bad
on
Change preposition
about
show examples
 the items. In
current
Correct article usage
the current
show examples
generation
Punctuation problem
generation,
show examples
 many people are interested
to share
Change preposition
in sharing
show examples
 their personal
view
Fix the agreement mistake
views
show examples
 on the internet
Punctuation problem
, what
show examples
what
Correct pronoun usage
whatever
show examples
 ever purchased
,
Punctuation problem
;
show examples
Linking Words
therefore
Punctuation problem
therefore,
show examples
 it's automatically
reached
Wrong verb form
reaches
show examples
 with public very fast and
useful
Verb problem
is useful
show examples
 to
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
customers, because they can easily
analysis
Replace the word
analyse
show examples
on
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the brand and purchase if they
interested
Verb problem
are interested
show examples
.
Secondly
Linking Words
, most of the reviewers compared
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
 device
with
Change preposition
from
show examples
 different companies
henceforth
Punctuation problem
, henceforth
show examples
purchaser
Correct article usage
the purchaser
show examples
 can easily understand the quality and price.
For
Linking Words
Example
Punctuation problem
Example,
show examples
As
Fix capitalization
as
show examples
 per the latest CNN
survey
Punctuation problem
survey,
show examples
 many companies
before
Punctuation problem
, before
show examples
 launching material to market,
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
are
doing
Verb problem
apply
show examples
analysing through YouTube based on the trend
upgrading
Punctuation problem
, upgrading
show examples
 the stock.
On the other hand
Linking Words
,
Mainly
Fix capitalization
mainly
show examples
due to
Linking Words
Linking Words
this kind
Fix the agreement mistake
these kinds
show examples
 of
Use synonyms
reviews
Punctuation problem
reviews,
show examples
 it's not
benefiting
Replace the word
beneficial
show examples
 to the consumer because if
reviewer
Correct article usage
a reviewer
show examples
given
Wrong verb form
gives
show examples
 bad
feedback
Punctuation problem
feedback,
show examples
 most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
people don't like to purchase
Linking Words
hence
Punctuation problem
, hence
show examples
 the
company
Check wording
company's
show examples
 value will
reduce
Verb problem
decrease
show examples
 in the market. On
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
top of that
buyers
Punctuation problem
, buyers
show examples
 are
confusing
Replace the word
confused
show examples
 because
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 search
Fix the agreement mistake
engines
show examples
engine
Punctuation problem
engine,
show examples
many
Correct word order
there are many reviews
show examples
reviews
Use synonyms
 are there for one product
,
Punctuation problem
;
show examples
moreover
Linking Words
, many of the reviewers don't have proper contact information
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
online
Punctuation problem
online,
show examples
therefore
Linking Words
 we cannot able to trust
with
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
reviews
Use synonyms
. In conclusion, I have argued that online product
reviews
Use synonyms
 are best
to purchase
Change preposition
for purchasing
show examples
 a new item because
buyer
Fix the agreement mistake
buyers
show examples
easily
Verb problem
can easily
show examples
 identify the value of the item and
it's
Use the right word
its
show examples
 worth to spend an amount on
required
Correct article usage
the required
show examples
 product or not and
finally
Linking Words
 benefit
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
consumers.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence
Make one main idea in each paragraph and begin it with a clear line.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, but, then.
grammar
Fix basic grammar and spelling to make the text easy to read.
content
Give real and clear examples to back your points.
task response
Finish with a short restate of your view.
accuracy
Keep facts simple and true.
content
The writer has a clear view on the topic.
structure
The essay tries to discuss both sides and has a conclusion.
readability
Some ideas are easy to read and follow.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: