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Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family thant eating out in restaurants or canteens. do you agree or disagree?

#people #home #thant #restaurants #canteens
A simple recognition to the finding of researchers, it’s obviously evident while many people subscribe to cooking and eating at
hom
e whether al
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home, whether
one or not, other prefer to eat in restaurants and cafes. eve
n th
used as an intensive especially to indicate something unexpected
Even
ough eating in restaurants sounds fascinating, I totally agree to make coo
k an
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cooking
d eat it at
home
.
Firstly
, cooking at
home
 brings you a wide list of foods to choose.
Besides
, all the ingredients are used in foods are surely without any bacteria and are clean.
Secondly
, fast-food is highly cost. Despite of expensive foods their qualities are declining. While people could spend those mon
ey to
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monies
 have a perfect meal at homes with cheaper prices.
Furthermore
, addicting to have a meal at restaurants brings people nothing but obesity, blood-pressure matters, even som
e times st
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
roke. Since the quality of oil and material which are used in outdoor foods are doubtfully healthy, sometimes about half people who eat at kin
d of
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the kind
 place have serious body problems that take lon
g to
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longer
 counteract and curb them. To conclude, despite of
this
 fact that many individuals and families using res
taurants foods to
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restaurants, foods
 not waste time in their daily life, many people believe the more amount of
home
 foods, the healthier population.
Also
, it is needless to indicate Family members gather together to assemble a dish and it makes the family relationships stronger.
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