You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: • describe what the group does • explain why the group is good for the community • suggest alternative days and times for practice

Dear Mr Harris, I hope
this
letter finds you well. As you are familiar with Cheki band which I am one of its members, used to
practiced
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on Tuesday and Friday
evening
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in
community
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the community
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hall
. Yesterday suddenly your assistance called me and she announced
us
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to us
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we are not allowed to use there anymore. all the members are really astonished. Let me explain
you
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in detail, why are we need
this
hall
.In
fact
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this
five-member group is a classic music band, as we are living in
such
a cottage rooms
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, we haven't a professional space to improve our skills .
furthermore
we are planning to make a fascinating album to publish our songs as soon as possible.
besides
, Playing classic music in
this
ancient
hall
is caused to rise
number
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of visitors which are coming in every Tuesday and Friday. According to your assistant suggestion, I am considering
to change
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the days of performances if it's possible. I am quietly obscure which days
another
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performances are running,
However
, for our
band
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there seems no problem to set
sunday
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Sunday
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and Wednesday morning as our meeting days. So, would you please indicate
us
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about your
hall
free times? your assistance in
this
matter is greatly appreciated.
Your
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Sincerely, Chi Chung
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ensemble
  • rehearsal
  • community engagement
  • cultural enrichment
  • public performances
  • diversity
  • inclusivity
  • musical education
  • alternative arrangements
  • schedule compatibility
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