You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: • describe what the group does • explain why the group is good for the community • suggest alternative days and times for practice

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Dear Mr Harris, I hope

this

letter finds you well. As you are familiar with Cheki band which I am one of its members, used to

practiced

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on Tuesday and Friday

evening

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evenings

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community

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the community

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hall

. Yesterday suddenly your assistance called me and she announced

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to us

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we are not allowed to use there anymore. all the members are really astonished. Let me explain

you

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in detail, why are we need

this

hall

.In

fact

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this

five-member group is a classic music band, as we are living in

such

a cottage rooms

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, we haven't a professional space to improve our skills .

furthermore

we are planning to make a fascinating album to publish our songs as soon as possible.

besides

, Playing classic music in

this

ancient

hall

is caused to rise

number

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of visitors which are coming in every Tuesday and Friday. According to your assistant suggestion, I am considering

to change

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the days of performances if it's possible. I am quietly obscure which days

another

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other

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performances are running,

However

, for our

band

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there seems no problem to set

sunday

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and Wednesday morning as our meeting days. So, would you please indicate

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to us

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about your

hall

free times? your assistance in

this

matter is greatly appreciated.

Your

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Yours

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Sincerely, Chi Chung

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