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People who live in foreign countries should follow the traditions and customs. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Customs and traditions are a way of living in a particular
place
. It is agreed that people living in foreign countries ought to adopt the mode of living of their host nation because it makes the visitors blend into the society and
also
 makes them open to learn new ways of life.
First
 of all, a person living in a foreign
country
 is assumed to be from the
country
 when customs are followed. Visitors who do not wish to be identified usually follow the traditions of the
place
.
For instance
, most people who visit the middle east dress like them and
also
 women cover their hair so as to blend into the usual way of dressing.
Likewise
, tea is taken regularly in Finland which is extremely cold.
This
 is mostly done to protect people from harsh weather condition.
Therefore
, people coming from other places would have to follow suite.
Furthermore
, people should be open to change. Moving to a foreign nation makes one adapt to various things
such
 as weather, language and music.
This
, usually differ from
place
 to
place
. So, living in a particular
place
 comes with learning how these people do things and getting accustomed to their method of life.
Finally
, learning other peoples culture promotes diversity. To clarify, French is taught in most schools in Africa today.
As a result
, most people who are not native speakers still value and speak French.
Therefore
, following cultures of the host
country
 ensures diversity. In conclusion, it is agreed that people who live in foreign nations should abide to the customs and traditions of the host
country
 as they would like to mix up with other people in the
country
 and
also
 accept new methods of living.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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