Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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new world that we live in, a
lot
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of improvement has been made in the area of trading with the set up and diversification of supermarket in some nations making local shops unable to compete in the race. Some individuals opine that the close down of local shops would bring about the stop in local society
growth
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grows
.
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essay
intend
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intends
is intended
to support the above view and
profer
marked by suitability or rightness or appropriateness
proper
reasons why.
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, local shops
are associated
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is associated
with a
lot
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of history and
comardeship
the quality of affording easy familiarity and sociability
comradeship
in small villages and towns.
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is because a
lot
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of them share history with the village.
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makes it so essential in any small town.
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- some shops were opened the same year the town was established. And they are
know
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known
to have
foster
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fostered
a
lot
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of relationships among the people in
such
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villages.
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Therefore foreclosure
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Therefore, foreclosure
of said shops would lead to a death in the strength of the community and socialisation.
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, small shops are known to cater well to the needs of the minority or resource-poor communities.
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is because they sell mainly to the consumer and at affordable
prices unlike
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prices, unlike
supermarket whose prices are fixed and at mostly high cost.
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demonstrate
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demonstrates
is demonstrated
why these small shops are needed to stay for without them the masses would suffer.
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supermarket
bring
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brings
to a community variety in goods.
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, foodstuffs and provision not available in small shops can be bought from them.
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However these
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However, these
is
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are
a small ripple effect in the numerous advantages local shops
profer
like better; value more highly
prefer
. In conclusion, it is true that supermarkets are more and over-riding local shops in many nations today,
nevertheless
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small
shops
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shop's
history, built
relationship
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relationships
a relationship
and affordability makes it
bad
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worse
if closed down as it would most likely bring about a
break down
the act of disrupting an established order so it fails to continue
breakdown
in local community set-up.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic benefits
  • community identity
  • personalized customer service
  • strong relationships
  • wide variety of goods
  • lower prices
  • community spirit
  • local events
  • sponsorships
  • cultural heritage
  • homogenize
  • logistics
  • carbon footprint
  • inequality
  • low-income individuals
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