Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Although
the establishment of supermarkets in some areas of the world is fast on the rise,
this
trend is causing a strain on local shops. According to some, shutting down these local businesses will result in
death
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the death
of small communities around them. I completely agree with
this
notion because most of these small scale enterprises are run by natives of these communities.
First
of all,
majority
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the majority
of these small businesses are owned by members of the
community
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community, thus
thus
closing them would cause these locals to migrate to areas where their businesses can thrive. An example is seen in the reduction in population of some towns in Kampala, Uganda; many small scale businesses were forced to shut down as they had few patronage due to the development of large foreign malls and supermarkets in these towns. A majority of residents in the area preferred to buy foreign goods from the large stores
thus
many native shops owners had to leave the area to other places.
In addition
to
this
,
patronising
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patronize
local businesses
encouragedls
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encourage
encourages
unity and builds the spirit of friendship as both buyers and sellers are natives to the
community
.
This
would be lost if these
form
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forms
of trading
is closed
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are closed
down, affecting
community
spirit.
Secondly
, many local businesses sell their products at low
rates which
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rates, which
is profitable
to
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for
both the buyers and sellers.
For instance
, local farmers would rather sell their produce at wholesale prices to customers compared to supermarkets which sell at retail cost. Closure of
this
form of trade would tell on the finances of locals
seein
having vision, not blind
seeing
that they would need to pay more to get the same quantity of goods.
This
financial strain would push people to move to areas where goods are more affordable, especially when there is no extra source of income.
Furthermore
, a high number of local businesses are located within the
community
, close to people's
residence meaning
Accept comma addition
residence, meaning
that consumables can be purchased with ease and comfort. Closing them down implies that locals would have to journey far distances to buy these products as most large stalls are located in busy, targeted areas.
Thus
, locals may migrate to towns because
od
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
this
reason. To sum up, the development of supermarkets is increasing nowadays causing
most local
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more local
businesses to close down. I believe
this
issue should be closely examined by the government and certain measures taken to prevent it as closure of
such
shops would cause problems within the
community
.
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