Advertisements of snacks and toys have a great impact on children and their parents. So, the advertisements to children should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

Countless adverts corroborate the adage, " Seeing is believing", albeit children get affected negatively. Toys and snacks are made ubiquitous, inviting children to try them out incessantly. I am in concord with banning all
such
commercials.
However
, it seems that
this
issue is more academic than practical in real terms.
First
and foremost, smart corporations target children for their products. Invariably, their marketing department devises a round-the-clock bombardment
commericals
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commercial
commercials
on TV. What children watch, they aspire to have all or for the sake of parity, they desire
o
in the direction of
to
emulate their peers.
Consequently
, it is a hard job for moderately earning parents to discipline and content their offspring.
Secondly
, commercials are designed in a manner that children feel that they cannot do without them.
For instance
, the packaged food is full of preservatives and additives. Yet, they are depicted in a manner that once they are
consumed they
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consumed, they
will become like a 'Superman'. Bizarrely, all in the name of bottom line
such
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a message that seems to convey no meaning
hokum
is sold by large corporations targeting mouldable minds - children. Granted, large corporations need to run their show forever. But at whose expense is a question that stirs and presents an ethical dilemma. To me there must be a demarcation drawn on what they claim, too. Many a
time
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times
, they on making fallacious claims and providing untrue information which does not serve the objective for the greater good. It is a shame! In a nutshell, the demerits of commercials of toys and snacks outweigh their merits. There is always a line between 'use' and 'abuse' and we need to explain
this
to children
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