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Some people think that for individuals, planning for the future is a waste of time. It is more important for individuals to focus on the present. Do you agree or disagree?

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We are surrounded by friends in various periods in our life. We started making friends as early as we are
one
 year old. They share our happiness and unhappiness. Some people believe to choose friends who always have the same opinions as
them
of them or themselves
their
they
, while others believe it is not the case. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both these views and my
opinion
 on should I choose friends based on his or her opinions. On
one
 hand, some believe
one
 should
makes
Suggestion
make
 friends that have the same opinions as
one
 does. As friends are important to us, we have them in all of our important events. From starting schools to graduation, from starting a relationship to getting married. They are around us all the time, when we have doubts, we consult our friends right away. Having same opinions from friends
do provide
Suggestion
does provide
 emotional support to us as we know our friends are supporting us. These kind of supports
do provide
Suggestion
does provide
better feeling
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a better feeling
 as we need these for us to face various up and down in our
life time
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
.
On the other hand
, some believe it is better to have friends disagree with them every now and
then
. They believe listen to a different
opinions
Suggestion
opinion
 on a
situtation
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situation
 can provide a better picture that
one
can not
can not
cannot
 see. Having a
second
opinion
 helps people to think in a different angle, which might able to help
one
 that spending too much time on worrying things that they might not need to worry on. Providing another way out for them to solve the problem. In my
opinion
, friends
should not be choose
Suggestion
should not choose
should not be chosen
 by if their opinions align with mine. It is more important to have friends I can share with, willing to listen to my problems. No
matter they
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matter, they
 agree
or disagree my
Suggestion
or disagree with my
opinion
, as long as they are willing to be there when I need them,
then
 it is a good
one
.

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