The urban transport system receives more funds compared to the rural transport system? Why do you think it is so? How can it be solved.

The transportation system in the
cities
are
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highly
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funded than those of the smaller
towns
. I believe it is
as
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a result of the high
population
of the
cities
,
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and
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also
because
cities
contribute higher taxes,
however
, funding can be increased for the smaller
towns
through migration initiatives. In
this
essay, we will examine these two causes and the solution.
Firstly
, city residents contribute higher taxes, and they
out-number
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local residents .
As a result
of the dense
population
in the metropolis, more taxes are collected,
hence
leading to
a
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higher
revenue
in these
areas
.
Also
, the dense
population
has created a need for constant maintenance of these facilities.
For example
,
according to
the 2006 Nigerian Census, Lagos state had a
population
of
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a 25million
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25million
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25 million
while
Ogbomoso had just 250,000 and
these
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caused the Lagos state government a 35% increase in transport maintenance as against the 10% expended in Ogbomoso. In order to resolve
this
, it is advised that migration to smaller
towns
should be encouraged, so as to create meaningful development of these
areas
,
consequently
increasing tax
revenue
for
government
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to implement road projects. Unarguably, rural migration supports growth and development and these can be encouraged through various incentives
such
as payment of monthly allowance to migrants, in order to encourage them to stay in
such
places.
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is the strategy currently being adopted by Italy.
Hence
, an increase in local
population
will result in increased
revenue
for road projects. In conclusion, the transportation system of the
cities
receives a higher budget than the smaller
towns
because the
cities
are populated, and their infrastructures need to be constantly maintained.
Likewise
, more income is generated from the urban
areas
. In order to resolve
this
disparity, citizens should be encouraged to live in the smaller
towns
to ensure higher
revenue
from these
areas
.
This
will provide more funds for the authorities to spend on road projects.

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