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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Educational institutions should accept equal number of men and women students.
This
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 statement can be agreed to some extent as well as be disagreed. We live in a democratic country and inequality should not be encouraged. The proportion of people must be equal and both male and female should have
similar ratio
Suggestion
similar ratios
a similar ratio
 in academics. It is necessary that men and women are required for building up of a nation. We have seen that long back even though male dominated the role of a female was of much significance. By educating women, it will in turn benefit the future generation. It is the mother that plays an important role in nourishing a child. The kid will be benefitted more if the mother is educated. Providing seats based on gender should be abolished. One must receive his/her reward based on their talent and capabilities. If the girl is capable of studying better than the boy, more opportunity should be given to her rather than degrading her ability just because of her gender. So it is necessary to provide
equal proportion
Suggestion
an equal proportion
 of opportunity to both male and female
instead
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 of any discrimination.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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