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Modern technology, such as personal computers and the internet have made it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of the time instead of going to office every day. What are the some of the advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

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Up-to-date technology
such
 as laptops and the World Wide Web allowed a greater group of individuals to perform their office tasks at the convenience of their personal space nowadays. Now that their travel
time
 is gone, they are using it into more lucrative actions. In my opinion, there are both merits and demerits on
this
 type of working platform.
To begin
 with, there are a number of benefits with regards to working at
home
. Convenience and flexibility are some of them. A person who works from his
home
 has utmost control of his
time
 and priorities. He can work conveniently at his own pace and submit all his tasks through electronic mails. Another positive aspect of
this
 is a better work-life balance. Workers will have more
time
 with their families now that they are staying at
home
.
This
 will result into more bonding
time
 and firsthand interactions with his wife and children. A recent survey
by
Suggestion
of
 SWS-Philippines in 2016 reflects that 85% of workers in Metro Manila will choose to work in their houses if given a chance.
On the other hand
, doing your office tasks at
home
 has its own demerits as well. Isolation is one of them. Since a worker does not have that office environment anymore, he might feel that he
do not belong
Suggestion
does not belong
into
Suggestion
in
 the organization resulting
into
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in
 loss of passion and drive to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 his tasks. Another setback is the presence of multiple distractions. Family members might distract you while you are busy working on a deadline. To illustrate, trying to concentrate on your computer while pampering your crying child is a very challenging task to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
. To conclude with, the set-up of doing your work in your house both brings benefits and drawbacks to an individual. In my personal standpoint, it is up to the person’s discretions on how he will make use of
this
 working scheme and turn it into his personal advantage.
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