Smoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people with potentially serious effects on their health. Explain some reasons for this problem and suggest some possible solutions.

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In recent times, intake of
tobacco
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is on the increase among youths which can lead to serious medical problems.
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could be
as a result
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of knowledge deficit and joblessness,
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,
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health education
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health, education
and
creation
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the creation
of jobs can help
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this
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menace. On the one hand, due to knowledge deficit, young people ingest
tobacco
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without knowing its effects to
health
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.
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, they are unaware of the medical
problems smoking
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problems, smoking
have
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has
on their
health
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,
thus
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predisposing themselves to danger.
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, due to the rate of unemployment in most societies, young individuals tend to
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of friends, bad gangs and cultist which they end up smoking in order for them to belong.
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, I have a friend that graduated from
university
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the university
of
Nigeria Nsukka
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Nigeria, Nsukka
, in the year 2010, due to the fact that there was no employment, he joined some bad gangs and started smoking
tobacco
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.
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, unawareness and unemployment in the society, predisposes the youths to ingest
tobacco
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.
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, there are some possible solutions to
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problems
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problem
.
Firstly
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,
health
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education should be carried out.
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, the youth should be sensitised about the
health
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challenges that comes with smoking of
tobacco
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, since most of them are unaware.
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, job creation for the young individuals can help
crub
a horse's bit with an attached chain or strap to check the horse
curb
smoking. Government should provide jobs by building industries, so that youths will not be jobless, thereby, quitting bad gangs and behaviour,
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been
the state or fact of existing
being
useful to themselves and the society.
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, a recent study carried out by
World
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the World Health Organisation
Health
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Organisation, it was stated that
youths
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the youths
that are employed are not involved in smoking.
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,
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health educating
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health, educating
and creating jobs for them can help reduce the rate of ingesting
tobacco
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among young people. In conclusion, while most youths are jobless and unaware of the effects of
tobacco
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to
health
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,
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health educating
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health, educating
and creating jobs for them by the Government can help solve
this
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problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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