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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Nowadays, the contemporary technology is considered to create a mono-c
ulture
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cultural
world
. Some people have believed that
this
 is the reason why we are g
radually
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graded
using the same way to communicate, entertain, transfer,… But others find it beneficial to
this
 in order to integrate.
First
 of all, the social media platform n
ow is
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has now been
popular t
o all over the
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all over the
world
. People could communicate and exchange information despite of distance. It leads to the result that people are influenced by foreigners’ civilization.
For example
, we easily come across pictures or information which have e
ffect
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an effect
on our mindset.
Second
 of all, as the means of transportation is now e
nhancing,
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enhanced
 it is comfortable for people to travel around the
world
 which could likely to lead to the culture’s penetration. Because of the travelling without difficulty, people may adopt the perceptions of the country they come and could generate a single
world
 culture.
However
, it is assumed that I
nternet
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the Internet
has contributed a huge part in enriching each n
ations’
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nation’s
culture. Thanks to the informative things which be s
preaded
distribute or disperse widely
spread
on social media, people are now acquiring a lot of things about the o
thers
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
countries’ customs. In conclusion, a mono-c
ulture
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cultural
world
 is being created by the technology because of the social media and travelling which could impacts to people’s mindset and change their cultures. But it is
also
 said to be a factor that can help each n
ations
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nation
improve their own customs in a good way.

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