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It is generally believed that people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Our society is bounded by a strong belief that children are born with certain talents which are
otherwise
 difficult to cultivate.
On the other hand
, quite a few examples have clouded
this
 theory by showcasing how practice can make a man perfect. In
this
 essay I will be discussing both
this
 views along with my opinion. We have all heard and seen child prodigies making it to the
bews
information about recent and important events
news
bus
base
 channels. It has become common to encounter 2 year old singing like a
nighingale
European songbird noted for its melodious nocturnal song
nightingale
although
 the parents claim that the child was never exposed to music. It is a proven fact that certain talents are God's gift and comes naturally to those who were born with the blessings. These prodigies grow up to become successful in whichever fields they were meant to be in.
However
, it
doesnt
does not
doesn't
 mean that the others
our
plural of "I"
we
 left behind. Out of the worlds top 10 musicians of the world, 8 were self-made. These 8 artists
owes
Suggestion
owe
 everything to the practice they
did
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 over the years. One does not need to be born with talent to become successful in one's pursuits the other way to achieve the same is to work hard towards it. I am a firm believer
thatbwe
 can do anything that we put our heart on. A famous saying goes
thay
pointing out something
that
their
 hard work is the key to success. In conclusion, maybe the person born with special talents gets a kick
start
Accept comma addition
start, however
however
 no one can take away the
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
.

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