Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

it
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It
is common that the news media is often covered by problem and
suffering
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the suffering
.
Althought
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Although
I agree with the idea that
thios
denotes a person or thing
this
those
these
trend popularly affects individuals and society I think that its advantages should be mentioned.
to
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To
begin
with it
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with, it
cannot be denied that
broading
elegance by virtue of fineness of manner and expression
breeding
reports
plkay
participate in games or sport
play
an important role to raise people
awarenes
having knowledge of
awareness
about
current alarming situation
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the current alarming situation
.
thanks
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Thanks
to it audiences can see the serve sight of melting polar ice and a wide list of endangered species is on the verge of
extinct
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extinction
.
recently
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Recently
, the news of Amazon deforestation has been spread
worldwilde
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
worldwide
and thousands of people have joined a hand to create an email letter which will be sent to Brazil presidents and UNICEF.
Furthermore
, problems that media reports show can educate the public about justice,
thus prevent
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have thus prevented
crime
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the crime
from doing wrong when all the audiences can see the punishment and imprisonment that crime has to receive.
Hopwever
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However
, media reports are likely to exaggerate the real fact with the view to drawing attention and getting higher profit from the increasing views and the amount of advertisements.
for
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For
instance, in 2012 several news reported that at the end of that year there would be
apoealypse
a cosmic cataclysm in which God destroys the ruling powers of evil
apocalypse
and
noone
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no one
could
surve
save from ruin, destruction, or harm
save
serve
solve
.
in
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In
fact everyone
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fact, everyone
were
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was
still safe and even live until now.
Moreover
, when
news
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the news
is filled with social issues and illegal activities can be a source of information that
crime
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a crime
could use to break the law which is quite dangerous.
to
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To
conclude, media reports on problems and
emergences
a sudden unforeseen crisis (usually involving danger) that requires immediate action
emergencies
can be informative for those who might be
concerned but
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concerned, but
the disadvantages are much stronger if the media put too much emphasis on reporting these stories.

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  • pessimistic outlook
  • exposed to negative news
  • stress and anxiety
  • success stories
  • balanced reporting
  • well-informed public
  • rational decisions
  • sense of helplessness
  • apathy
  • skew public perception
  • mistrust in institutions
  • enhance well-being
  • mental health
  • manipulate public opinion
  • serve specific agendas
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