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Shopping has become a new favorite pastime for the young generation. Why this is the case? Should they encourage to develop other hobbies too?

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Shopping has become an integral part of our life. Young people are more attracted to
this
 habit than older people and it has almost become their favourite hobby. While there are many reasons attributed to
this
 habit
such
 as increased spending power and peer influences, some people argue that they should be encouraged to spend their
time
 wisely in other useful activities and I completely agree with that because
time
 is the most precious thing in the world. For one thing, the increased spending power is one of the main reasons for
this
 addiction to shopping in our society. Compared to the past, there are many job opportunities available in the market and most of them are ready to pay a large amount. Our young people now have plenty of disposable income they don’t know how to spend.
Secondly
, they are easily getting influenced by their peers who might be doing window shopping almost every week, for no reasons. The recent survey conducted by a website on Bayshore Shopping Mall business in Kanata city, indicates that the majority of their sales are coming from younger people who had just started their career.. Having said that, some people argue that our young society needs to be diverted and encouraged to spend their free
time
 in more better and useful ways. I strongly agree with that, because the only thing that cannot be retrieved back is “the
time
”.
Instead
 of spending
time
 in shopping malls, we should encourage them to involve in physical activities
such
 as sports and games. Or they can join a course that enhances their skill sets.
For instance
, those in the software field can spend their
time
 in learning Artificial Intelligence, which is growing very fast in today’s market. In conclusion, while it is true that young people are getting attracted towards frequent shopping, they should be encouraged to spend their free
time
 more wisely on activities that could help them to lead a more comfortable and healthy life.
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