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Some people think that parents should give their children complete freedom. Others feel that parents should limit their children's freedom. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Every parent has his own way of raising a
child
. While some believe in complete freedom, others are of the opinion that it should be restricted.
This
 essay will shed some light on both views before reaching a reasoned conclusion. Many parents advocate giving their offspring’s complete freedom.
This
 is because they believe that
otherwise
 the
child
 will feel suffocated and
thus
 will not grow up in an environment conducive to his development.
For instance
, by not restricting a youngster's choice, he will be free to make his own decisions and feel fulfilled and content.
However
, I would side with the belief that unbridled parenting can result in a
child
 going astray. By not having an authority figure, a
child
 can grow up being disrespectful to others.
On the other hand
, some parents limit their children's freedom for some obvious reasons. One of which being that the children may not be mature enough to make good reasoned decisions. Many youngsters,
for example
, are easily influenced by peer pressure into trying dangerous activities
such
 as drugs and smoking. Needless to say, that it is more advisable for parents to counsel their children and
also
 give them the opportunity to make their own choices.
As a result
,
this
 would strengthen the parent-
child
 bond and give the
child
 enough space to experience life. In conclusion, I believe that unbridled parenting, can be detrimental to the
child
 and at
such
 a young age, parental supervision is crucial
for
Suggestion
to
 his development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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