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We live in an age of mass communication, and obtain information and opinions from different media sources almost every day. Although many people feel that they form their own opinions, in my view the majority of people are strongly influenced by the media

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All media resources provide a lot of
content, making in
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content, making
this
way
 kind of pressure on people’s mind.
This
 essay totally agrees that
media
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the media
has
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have
 political and social impact due to creating another perception of facts with various methods of their presentation and popularization of trends. News and data could be given in different ways by media resources, that blunt critical comprehension and readiness to check given information.
Moreover
, TV channels, periodic and informational agencies have a power to spread information, which is useful for concrete lobby groups, and, in
such
way
, form
adequate society opinion
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an adequate society opinion
adequate society opinions
 for their purpose.
For example
,
American research agency
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the American research agency
an American research agency
 has recently reported that 68% of adults from 25 to 55 years old will not verify information, if they meet it in at least three different sources.
On the other hand
,
media
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the media
 is a huge leverage for promoting
wide range
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a wide range
 of social movements. More and more men and women join distinguish communities, which propagandized healthy
way
 of life, running, reduction in consumption and other, thanks to sharing appropriate content by television and printed or online periodic.
For instance
,
number
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the number
a number
 of wild animals’ protectors in Australia
has increased
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have increased
 twice in
last
 three years, because of
effective publicity campaign
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an effective publicity campaign
 launched by national TV channels. In conclusion, Mass media is usually called the fourth branch of government due to huge possibility to make influence on all strata of the population. They use diverse approaches to present data in a
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
way
 to make political changes happen.
Additionally
, mass media can create
army
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an army
 of followers for
last
 trends, that, definitely, is an active driver for various social transformations.

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