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Today more and more tourist are visiting places where conditions are difficult such as the Sahara desert or the Antartic. what are the benefits and disadvantages for tourist who visit such places. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Over the
last
 few years
,
Accept space
,
there
has been increasing
Suggestion
was increased
 in the number of people travelling to hostile places.
Tourist
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A tourist
The tourist
 could get enjoying adventurous trip and there may be some disadvantages to
this
 trend and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will discuss both in
this
 essay. To
begim
take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
begin
 with there are many advantages to
visitig
the activity of making visits
visiting
 the remote areas.
Firstly
,
tourisim
the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
 strengthens the economic conditions of
such
 places.
with
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With
 more and more
tourist
 visit in a country the better the economy grows multiple.
For example
,
Accept space
,
many roads and hotels
were build
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were built
built
 in remote areas these facilities used by locals and as well as it is
also
 helpful for travellers and
hence
 it helps in enhancing the economy.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
if one wants to enjoy the beauty of nature closely
then
 he needs to needs to go through some troublesome ways. Like
,
Accept space
,
to see animals
of
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on
 Amazon jungle one has to stay in woody areas for
couple
Suggestion
a couple
 of days without using of modern facilities.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
travelling to
such
 places like Sahara desert and
antartic
Suggestion
Antartic
 has its disadvantages too.
Firstly
, local peoples find it
difficult to to share
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difficult to share
 the natural resources with the
tourist
 that already very in low
content
Accept comma addition
content, for
for instance
, water is already in very low quantity in the desert areas and with more
tourist
 visit
such
 places it become really hard for locals. And visiting Antartica, its life challenging to travel to
such
 places because its very coldest continent. To sum up, if many
tourist
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tourists
 travel in difficult areas, travellers will
also
 effect as well as the locals
also
Suggestion
Also
 find difficulties to share their natural resources. In my opinion, the positive aspects of visiting dangerous places like
Sahara
Suggestion
the Sahara
 and Antarctica outweigh the negative aspects.

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