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The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills.

#crime #rate #offenders #parents #skills
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The increasing
crime
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rate
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 of one of the main highlighted issues in any country and a large number of ratio, children seem to be involved in these issues.These are
as a result
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 of lack of Education and an increase in the unemployment
rate
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.It is believed by some people the only possible way to overcome juvenile
crime
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 is by implementing better
parental
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parenting
 skills.I believe better
parental
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parenting
 skills itself alone cannot solve the rise in
crime
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rate
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. On the one hand, children of 1 to 6 years old at their early age receives initial
level
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 education at home and parents are solely responsible to provide the primary
level
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 knowledge and to guide them in differentiating between right and wrong in their early phase of life.During
this
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 age, their cognitive, intellectual skills are developing if children are not educated in a mannered way they become stubborn and develop negative habits which may lead to juvenile delinquency.Some parents failed to perform
such
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 abilities,
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, it is very crucial to teach parents improved
parental
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parenting
 skills at the early age of children.
On the other hand
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, teenager while receiving their academic education they are exposed to the outside world and spend their huge amount of time in school
moreover
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, they spend less amount of time with their parents.
School
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The school
 performs secondary responsibility in developing young once. Education
center
Suggestion
Center
 should devise a strategy for teaching adolescent if they are involved in any negative
activities
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activities, for
for
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instance if
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instance, if
 students in the USA school breaks any rules they are detained for a certain period of time where they receive proper guidance on their false
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. To conclude, to decrease the
crime
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rate
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 among
young children parents
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young children, parents
 can only provide primary
level
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 skills during their initial
lifecycle
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.It is not possible by teaching parents better
parental
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parenting
 skills alone will help to decrease criminal activities.
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, the educational institute plays a secondary
level
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 role in providing education and guidance which
significantly
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significant
 impact in reducing the
crime
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rate
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.
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