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It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both ideas by giving your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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majority
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The majority
Majority
 of people
believes
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believe
 that
some somepeople
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some people
some some people
 are born with
talent
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a talent
 which in the future they can be thought to be a super
athelte
a person trained to compete in sports
athlete
 or musician. While there
are
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is
certainty
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certainly
 valid arguments to the contrary, I personally agree with
this
. There are two primary reasons for
this
.
First
 of all,
birn
brought into existence
born
 with talents
give
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gives
 kids an opportunity to catch up their own
intrest
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
interests
 in
environment
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the environment
, while others not able to develop
theirselves
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their selves
. In their junior school, some kids opened their
hiden
not accessible to view
hidden
 talents, which would be their biggest lane to live
worth
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worthily
.
For
example my
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example, my
 friend Saran never thought that she has individual
talent
- drawing. Since
when she
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when, she
find
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finds
 her
hiden
not accessible to view
hidden
hiding
talent
, she has been really
enjoyed
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enjoying
 from drawing.
Further
 and even more important,
thoutght
,
majority
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the majority
 of people assumed that, finding their
talnent
someone who pays rent to use land or a building or a car that is owned by someone else
tenant
talent
 may have creative learning skill, which will
helps
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help
 them to find their future filled.
In other words
, creative mindset is the most essential tool
fir
appropriate to; intended for
for
 everyone who has
talent
.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, it may affect to their future perspective in choosing their jobs. Even when everyone has
talent
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the talent
a talent
 of
singning
the act of singing vocal music
singing

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