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Some people consider price as the most important thing to consider when buying a product such as a cell phone and services like medical treatment. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #price #product #cell #phone #services #treatment
In terms of spending money to Mobile phone and Medications is most important in our considerations as we have to be in control to avoid unnecessary expenditure. I agree some of people goes to hospit
al to ta
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the hospital
ke treatment for specif
ic diseas, but
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a specific disease
specific disease
specific diseases
they will be taking medication for additional health issues even if it's irrele
vent due t
having no bearing on or connection with the subject at issue
irrelevant
relevant
o doctor's prescription. Is
this
 advisable to sepnd
for a
pass time in a specific way
spend
send
dditional health issues?, No, I am not. The way people thinks
about
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think
 mobile phone services like if they pay more, the service is too good it seems, Is it real? My opinion is no. they h
ave
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They
to go and check the market services and compare the cost and features. If the cost is worth for the features they provide is acceptable,
then
 we can afford for it. Else try to reduce our expenditures.

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