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Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

In the contemporary world, advancements in technology have tremendously changed human's lives up to a great extent. Some people consider that technology in modern communication brings detrimental impacts to social bonds with each other. While I agree with
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 statement up to a certain extent,
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, I believe that it can bring some of perks to improve the situation as explained in below passage.
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, digital connections made people socially inactive these days compared to yesteryears.
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, most of the time children and adults are busy with smartphones or other channels, making virtual relationships than real ones. Half of these can be fake which could bring harm to the humans mentally and later physically.
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, poor physical interactions are making people less emotional and
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 is not a good sign for the community to maintain a peaceful environment.
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, children can be easily exploited and manipulate them to do dangerous actions
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 as public shootings or damaging to the properties.
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, humans will suffer from health issues
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 as obesity, diabetes and cardiovascular diseases due to their sedentary lifestyle, their attention to do physical activities are much lesser since they are busy with chatting to others via digital media.
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, virtual connections are not always harmful to the society, it helps to connect with people around the globe. In the past, it was difficult to maintain a relationship with less interaction, but technology advancements made it much simpler with social mediums
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 as Skype, Whatsapp and Facetime which brings people closer.
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, modern communication connects people who are in need of help during natural disasters. In conclusion, I believe modern communication technologies are helping to make certain situations better even though there are certain drawbacks in to it.
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, its individuals responsibility to use it wisely only to get things better.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interactions
  • messaging apps
  • social media
  • non-verbal cues
  • family bonds
  • dependency
  • digital communication
  • superficial relationships
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • social isolation
  • virtual connections
  • emotional satisfaction
  • real-life interactions
  • technological intrusion
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