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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table compares how many males and females were employed in
factories
 in England and Wales in half a century period.
Overall
, both the
number
 of male and female
workers
 significantly declined over the period
although
 the
number
 of
factories
 increased by almost three folds. At the beginning of the period, the amount of 287,100
males
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workers
 and 190,000 female
workers
 were employed, and it was nearly half a million employees in 225
factories
 in England and Wales.
In contrast
, fifty years later, the rate
workers
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of workers
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 declined to the lowest amount of 31,000
male
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males
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 and 30000 females got jobs in 600
factories
 in the UK. In 1861 and 1871, the
number
 of male
labor
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labour
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 sharply decreased from 131,780 to 80,123 and the rate of
the
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female
also
 decreased
160,000
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 to 60,000,
however
, the
number
 of
factories
 increased from 227 to 622 in England and Wales.
Moreover
, the
male
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number of male
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 worker slightly decreased
76,132
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 to 65,000 from 1881 to 1891 and female
workers
 decreased
10,000
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by 10,000
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 in the
next
 ten years from 60,000 in 1881. The figures for these two different periods show that the
number
 of
factories
 slightly decreased from 721 to 625.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words factories, number, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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