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The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates how many male and female workers were employed in British and Walsh
factories
 from the year 1851 to 1901. In general, the amount of male and female labours experienced
downward
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a downward
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 trend
through out
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throughout
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 the
period
, but the
number
 of
factories
 significantly increased with a fluctuating trend. At the beginning of the
period
, there
was
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were
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 nearly half a million
of
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apply
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male (287,100) and female (190,000) employees in 225 British and Walsh
factories
 .
In contrast
, these figures declined
into
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to
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total
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a total
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61,000
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of 61,000
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at the end
 of the
period
,
however
, the
number
 of
factories
 increased almost
three fold
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threefold
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 to 600. In 1861, the
amount
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number
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 of male workers rate slightly less than females, it was 131,780 males and 160,000 females in 227
factories
 in the given countries. After a decade, both
male
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males
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(80,123) and
female
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females
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(60,000)
less
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were less
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 than
the
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in the
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 previous
period
, but the rate of
factories
 increased to 622. In 1881 and 1891, the
number
 of male
worker
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workers
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 declined from 76,132 to 65,000
as well as
 females
50,000
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from 50,000
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 to 40,000 in the
factories
.
In addition
, the
number
 of
factories
 in England and Wales
were
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was
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also
 downward trend from 722 to 625.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words factories, period, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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