Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

These days online shopping
became
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very popular. So, some
people
prefer to buy from the
internet
,
while
others believe that it is not safe.
This
essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion.
In
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one
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hand, time is important for everyone, So some
people
do not have the time to
do
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go
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shopping
from
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the
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apply
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shops and
the
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stores
.
For example
, most shops nowadays close at eight o'clock
while
online
stores
are open
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at
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every time and in every day. And all
what
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that
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you need is an
internet
network
while
shopping from the real
stores
might cost some transportation costs. So,
thats
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that's
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why some
people
think that buying from the
internet
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is the best.
On the other hand
, the
internet
has spread a lot in the
last
years
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. And many
of
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websites
and online
stores
are available today.
But
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one research has
made
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in Maastricht University about the
fakes
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websites
. They found that from ten regular online
websites store
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website stores
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there is one irregular online shop. These fake
websites
might steal the credit
cards
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information if someone bought from them.
Hence
the belief that online shops are not safe.
In
addition
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80% of USA
people
use the
internet
to buy most of the things they need without thinking of whether is it safe or not. To illustrate, they buy from
the
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known
websites
such
as Amazon and Bool.
This
proves clearly that most of the
people
trust to buy from the
internet
. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both
point
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view
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I believe that the positives of online shopping
outweighed
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the negatives.

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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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