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People eat more processed food than they did in the past. Why is this? What are the effects of this?

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In
this
 contemporary era processed
food
 is extremely common among all individuals. These
days
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day
 humankind using processed
food
 when
compare
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compared
compares
comparison
 to decades ago is much higher. In
this
easy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 I will be addressing the current situation, why is
this
 happening? And
also
 include its demerits on the
people
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person's
 life. I want to start with why
this
plural of "this"
these
those
 days people prefer processed
food
 rather than homemade. These
days
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day
 mankind
are more busy with their works when compare
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are more busy with their work when compared
are more busy with their work when compare
 to
past
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the past
. People have no time to take care of their healthy living rather busy in earning money. Ignoring money can’t buy
health
. There often ignore the healthy options and try to take the foods which are available in cans. Which saves the cooking
time but
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time, but
 waste for once
health
occupied or in the control of; often used in combination
held
. Because of the busy
schedules people
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schedules, people
 often make mistake by buying processed
food
.
This
 is easy to
have
divide by two; divide into halves
halve
. People forget its effects on once
health
 and may lead to serious problems. Vanishing the facts about
such
 foods and taking them more frequently; can lead to
health
 issues like obesity, thyroid, lack of nutrition etc. All
this
 can happen because all processed
food
 is low in nutrition and high in unhealthy fats. In
this
 way people ruin their lives. Some of the processed
food
 which is common among mankind is fried noodles like
maggi
any art that invokes supernatural powers
magic
Maggi
mango
, canned tuna fish, fruits and
also
 vegetables which are available in the local markets. People should reduce intake of processed
food
 in order to have a healthy
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. Giving
importance
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the importance
to
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of
 healthy habits is vital. Irrespective of busy
schedules people
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schedules, people
 need to focus on proper diet, which can keep them healthy and fit.
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