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People eat more processed food than they did in the past. Why is this? What are the effects of this?

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In
this
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 contemporary era processed
food
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 is extremely common among all individuals. These
days
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day
 humankind using processed
food
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 when
compare
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compared
compares
comparison
 to decades ago is much higher. In
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easy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 I will be addressing the current situation, why is
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 happening? And
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 include its demerits on the
people
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person's
 life. I want to start with why
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this
plural of "this"
these
those
 days people prefer processed
food
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 rather than homemade. These
days
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day
 mankind
are more busy with their works when compare
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are more busy with their work when compared
are more busy with their work when compare
 to
past
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the past
. People have no time to take care of their healthy living rather busy in earning money. Ignoring money can’t buy
health
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. There often ignore the healthy options and try to take the foods which are available in cans. Which saves the cooking
time but
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time, but
 waste for once
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health
occupied or in the control of; often used in combination
held
. Because of the busy
schedules people
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schedules, people
 often make mistake by buying processed
food
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.
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 is easy to
have
divide by two; divide into halves
halve
. People forget its effects on once
health
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 and may lead to serious problems. Vanishing the facts about
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 foods and taking them more frequently; can lead to
health
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 issues like obesity, thyroid, lack of nutrition etc. All
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 can happen because all processed
food
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 is low in nutrition and high in unhealthy fats. In
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 way people ruin their lives. Some of the processed
food
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 which is common among mankind is fried noodles like
maggi
any art that invokes supernatural powers
magic
Maggi
mango
, canned tuna fish, fruits and
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 vegetables which are available in the local markets. People should reduce intake of processed
food
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 in order to have a healthy
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. Giving
importance
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the importance
to
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of
 healthy habits is vital. Irrespective of busy
schedules people
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schedules, people
 need to focus on proper diet, which can keep them healthy and fit.
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