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Many people today, especially in the developed world, are choosing to have fewer children, or none at all. Why is this happening, and do you think it is a good trend?

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Quite a few individuals in the developed world have chosen to conceive few offspring, or none whatsoever. There are several reasons for
this
 phenomenon, and it is debatable according to me. In ancient times, our ancestors had children more than a dozen.
This
 was because, they had the luxury of time and sufficient money to feed their family. Today,
on the contrary
, everything around us has changed. There is a growing need for money and people to sustain themselves. Even with the husband, and wife putting in extra hours at work they barely manage to make ends meet. In
this
 case, if they are to have children there are additional responsibilities of schooling and future career for the
child
.
Moreover
, the government of various nations is asking citizens to have nuclear families with only two children.
Also
, in a country with a growing economy the price of each product increases, which puts undue pressure on the earning members of a family. Parents prefer one
child
, as they are able to plan their
child
's future.
For example
: Households with more than two children are unable to give their children a decent education.
In contrast
 there are people who do not wish to have any children of their own, as they prefer a life only with their partner. When human beings are married, especially in India, they are forced to bear a
child
 within the
first
 year of marriage.
This
 creates unnecessary confusion between the newly married couple and they chose to have no babies at all. In conclusion, it may not be a good trend, but it is absolutely an economic decision.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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