some people think reading stories in books is better than watching tv or playing computer games for children. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

At present certain persons
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
belief
that book reading stories are
gain
Suggestion
gaining
more knowledge rather than to watch TV and computer games like Xbox for
childerns
.
Accept space
.
I will argue that why Book reading stories are so important for young kids.
Firstly
, nowadays in major cities current trend is teaching reading stories to kids because
this
generation
don't know
Suggestion
doesn't know
about their past culture and
traditionals
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
traditions
details
hence
many parents are interested to join
this activites
Suggestion
these activities
this activities
this activity
this activists
so that they can get more motivation knowledge and same time get confidence
on
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in
their life.
Secondly
, for teaching these
lessions
a unit of instruction
lessons
automatically
intersted
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
intercepted
entrusted
on
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in
their subjects
therefore
many useful thoughts are coming, on top that new skills will improve like fast reading and understanding new words.
For Example
,
Accept space
,
As per American
doctors
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doctors'
research due to reading novels, kids brain functionality
is improved
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has improved
improves
a lot and always they are in
very positive
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the very positive mindset
very positive mindset
mind
set. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, Mainly,
this
era youth is giving so importance to watching television and laptop games
therefore
they
suffering
Suggestion
suffer
are suffering
major problems like
Eye sight
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Eyesight
and over weight because don't have any physical
excerise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
and
continusely
at every point
continuously
continually
wataching
the act of observing; taking a patient look
watching
it's effecting to Eyes.
Next
is always playing laptop games they are learning negative things in their
mind
due to all the games are related to
killng
an event that causes someone to die
killing
others and fighting
stranges
the property of being physically or mentally strong
strength
then
automatically
lnject
for the most time
longest
bad stuff in
mind
.
For Instance
, recently in
UK school
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a UK school
UK schools
,
Accept space
,
13 years young guy
shotted
the act of firing a projectile
shot
badly henceforth many students are
died
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dying
after
interagation
a sentence of inquiry that asks for a reply
interrogation
he told it's
fun game
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a fun game
and gun operation seeking from
videogames
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video games
.
For
Suggestion
In
Conclusion, young buddies reading stories
is
Suggestion
are
very useful in their
mind
functionality
moreover
motivation and improving knowledge on their subjects rather than to learn
unwated
not wanted; not needed
unwanted
things like shooting and
killng
an event that causes someone to die
killing
others as
followed
Suggestion
follows
in Videogames.
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