Some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Any person who is born with certain qualities might differ from
the
other counterparts. Some are of the view that nature has equipped males with better than the other gender Correct article usage
apply
such
as females. I certainly assert Linking Words
this
opinion as Linking Words
men
have been created with more physical and emotional endurance.
Use synonyms
To begin
with, more physical strength has Linking Words
given
to Add a missing verb
been given
men
by Use synonyms
mother nature
which makes them better than females in certain areas. Correct your spelling
Mother Nature
This
means males are empowered by strong bones and muscles which enable them to carry out work which demands Linking Words
considerable
amount of physical Add an article
a considerable
efforts
. Fix the agreement mistake
effort
Additionally
, they can easily continue or execute the task for stretched hours without even taking a break. Linking Words
For example
, Linking Words
men
can usually be seen working Use synonyms
as
a mansion or drivers which needs physical resilience, and often eat or take a break when they finish the task.
Change preposition
in
Furthermore
, most Linking Words
of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
men
are gifted by nature with the mental power which Use synonyms
enable
them to handle any sort of emotional situation. Change the verb form
enables
This
means they can combat almost any depressed emotional feelings by applying their rational approach and Linking Words
safeguard
themselves from any mental psychological traumas. Wrong verb form
safeguarding
For example
, when a man faces any hard situation in life, Linking Words
such
as losing Linking Words
Correct pronoun usage
his parents
parents
or getting divorced, they usually Correct pronoun usage
his parents
tackle
the same with more ease comparatively than women.
Correct subject-verb agreement
tackles
To conclude
, every person is different in terms of natural qualities which is why Linking Words
men
are superlative than women as they possess high physical and mental capabilities. Use synonyms
Thus
, they often handle almost every tough situation using their physical capacity and by applying rational thinking.Linking Words
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