Some people think that it should be made mandatory for parents to attend formal education on parenting. To what extent you agree or disagree?
Some people argue that formal
education
on parenting should be made mandatory for parents
to attend. I strongly agree with this
statement. Due to
the history of bad parenting, with modern analysis of parenting and treatment of children in different age ranges, parents
need the help of professionals.
In current years, we have discovered new ways to discipline and educate kids. Children, of different ages, are a handful and parents
, especially new ones, need help on how to take care of and handle the situation when their kids get rowdy. With parenting education
, they can get the knowledge and help from a professional, the class can help them get ready for parenting, how to treat certain situations and solve a problem swiftly. However
, entering a class about parenting wouldn't help you with every obstacle that may come your way during the actual process of being a parent. The education
on parenting needs to be informative on how to handle stressful situations on your own terms instead
of blindly following the given instructions, the reason being that some of the tactics given may not work for certain parents
and work with certain kids.
In conclusion, it should be a requirement for parents
to attend formal parenting education
, but the class need to include not only informative tactics and examples on parenting but also
required to have instructions on how to handle a problem on your own.Submitted by aitam.dothi on
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