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Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Medical studies have shown that smoking leads to so many health issues not only for the smokers but
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 for people around them.
Although
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 there are arguments on both sides, I strongly agree that smoking should
ban
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 in public places.
Firstly
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, there are many people especially who smokes, are against the
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on
 smoking. They believe everyone has the right to choose what they want in life.
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, smoking is not illegal by law. So, smokers should have the freedom to do so. To some extent it is true that none of us have the right to stop other people about their habits, it could be good or bad as well.
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, people think that pubs and
clubs
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club
 business will come down if there is a
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 on public places.
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, there are more convincing arguments in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of a
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.
First
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 and foremost, it has been proved that smoking is injuries to health of the smoker and
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 the people surrounded by them, which can lead one person to cancer of the lungs, throat and mouth, and other sites of the body as well. From any perspective, it is not safe for the environment. Government has to make sure smoking should be done merely the area allocated for smoking. And should completely
ban
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 in public area and
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 be fined if found so.
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 only we can improve the surroundings to some extent. In conclusion, it is clear that the smoking
ban
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 in public places is a must option. Which can save thousands of people’s
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life
lives
? And better
mend
mean or intend to express or convey
meant
 for future children.
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