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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money.Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is true that many languages are fading with time because of d
evelopment
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the development
of international
language
 and globalization. While some people b
eileve
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
that it is totally waste of m
oney but
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money, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that government should i
ncurr
make oneself subject to; bring upon oneself; become liable to
incur
incurred
incurs
some expenses to protect l
ocal
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the local language
language
 from extinction.
Language
 is e
ssential part
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an essential part
of our country
culture
. The human being s
tart
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starts
learning
l
anguage
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the language
from childhood and develop connection with mother t
ongue but
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tongue, but
if
l
anguage
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the language
a language
doesn't remain in existence because of international
language
 literacy that could impact his children and future g
enrations.
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generations
Therefore
, Future generations will never get to know their own
culture
 without p
resence
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the presence
of local
language
 and they will blindly follow western
culture
.
This
 could hurt ethical and moral values of one's
culture
.
This
 is because it is important that g
overnment
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the government
should take necessary steps to stop extinction of
language
.
However
, some people has b
elief
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the belief
that spending money on
language
 is not worthy. At some extent it is true because international
language
 is in high demand and required to be successful in the world. Without international
l
anguage literacy,
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language, literacy
 an individual cannot do trade with other countries as well as could not be able to connect with people from other nations. Because of increase in demand of e
nglish,
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 people have to take
l
anguage proficiency test
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a language proficiency test
the language proficiency test
in order to f
ullfil
put in effect
fulfil
their dream for study in developed countries and explore the world.
Therefore
, these few reasons are claimed by people which reduce the importance of l
ocal
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the local language
language
. In conclusion,
l
anguage
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the language
should be conserved for survival of one's
culture
 and international
language
 importance cannot be denied.
Therefore
, it requires government to spend some money to create the awareness f
or
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of
language
.

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