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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology is now replacing their functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #money #computer #technology #functions
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Some people think that it is utterly futile to build and maintain public libraries because contemporary technology is replacing their places. I completely disagree with
this
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 statement owing to libraries are an intriguing
places
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place
 to learn without any side effects on an individual’s health.
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 with, reading and studying in the library is extremely ecstatic and fun. One is only surrounded by the wonderful books and people who are there for the purpose of getting knowledge, which give a sense of great feelings.
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, the libraries posses a peaceful environment,
with out
in absence of
without
 any disturbance, quiet and tranquil, having positive effects on an individual’s intellectual well-being. To illustrate that, In western countries, a
whooping
(used informally) very large
whopping
 amount of money is allocated annually for the construction
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of
 new libraries, because a growing number of people frequently visit them despite on conveniently accessible e-libraries. Another point to consider is, the libraries are traditional and effective places to educate one’s self harmlessly.
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, in the library there are dedicated sections for group study, where a person can involve in a discussion with their fellow and peers, which is extensively beneficial.
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, using gadgets for learning can have detrimental effects on
individual’s health especially
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an individual’s health, especially
an individual’s health especially
 the obesity and gradual decrease on an eye sight which can be stressful in the upcoming.
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, people who study in the library are more intellectually and physically sound, and have strong decision making skills, published in an article in Reader’s Digest quarterly. In conclusion, libraries offer tranquility and healthy environments for the aspirants,
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, authorities should be
encourage
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encouraged
 to invest generously on them for a productive generation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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