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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Is it a positive or negative development?

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There is no doubt that due to globalisation, the whole world
has became
Suggestion
has become
 a global village and it made possible for people to have any item from every corner of the world. In my opinion, it is a
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 development due to the easy
avialability
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
 of products, economic growth and easy for workers and student to adjust themselves in other countries.
First
 of all, due to globalisation, people can easily get any item whenever and wherever they need. If,
for example
, people can visit other nations or other parts of the world, they can easily access to
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
 desire good they
want namely
Accept comma addition
want, namely
, special cuisines of their own country, traditional clothes and so on.
Therefore
,
this
 development made accessible same goods everywhere and make lives
easy
Suggestion
easier
.
Furthermore
,
this
 advancement helps to increase the economies of the countries.
This
 is because of rise in trade, which include import and export of goods or products between different nations, without any barriers. To illustrate, reports of Times of
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
 newspaper showed that
the great
Suggestion
the greatest
 increase in finance of countries is only due to import and export trades. So, economic growth of nations is
also
 one the positive development of similar countries.
In addition
, the similar environment and cultures of different places made easy for people who work or study in other countries to adjust themselves. They do not find any difficulty to search their local foods and other things

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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