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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice dressing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Often it is believed that layer of cloth over a person’s skin can reveal a lot about a person’s background and personality. As human, we get to choose what we decide to wear and more often than not it aligns with our identity. I am a firm believer that a person’s dressing sense is highly influenced by a variety of factors
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 as
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’s traditions, profession, and ideologies among others things. The dress people choose to wear
disclose
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to disclose
 a lot more about
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’s upbringing that
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 they believe. Despite tradition having an impact on
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’s choice of style in
early years
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the early years
, surroundings while growing up has a bigger impact on
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’s attire opening up the windows to
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’s ideology.
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 will find people from tier 1 and 2 cities wearing western clothes
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 as jeans, trousers; tee-shirts compared to those from towns who are majorly seen wearing traditional attires. Apart from culture and
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the environmental condition
surroundings
, individual characteristics plays an even bigger role.
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, the personality of persons gets reflected in the dress on wear.
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 will find introverts dressing sense to be more subtle and calm
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 to extroverts who tend to wear clothes that demands attention
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, the
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
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generally tend
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generally tends
 to wear
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 plays a huge role in the disclosing the personality traits.
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 can be
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evidenced
 seen in people involved in serious business who generally wear monotonous solid colours
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 as black and blues in comparison to more colourful actors and actresses. In conclusion, I would reinstate that I agree that
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’s dressing is highly influenced by
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’s
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
 with culture and individual character playing a significant role.

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