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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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It is widely believed that marketing; motivate us to purchase things that we in fact not required. While others said that these marketing give updated information to enhance our life. In my
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.I agree that advertisements encourage purchasing unnecessary things. I will explain the reason behind. Nowadays
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 is playing a key role to sell the products, companies are using multiple sources for marketing their products, like TV advertisements, daily newspaper and populates etc. All these channels are well known for a lot of people have one instance, which had bought one product through
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TV advertisements
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 saw a promotion offer on cricket jersey with 75% discount popup showing in every 2 minutes and
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 purchased
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in fact not thinking either that product is being used or not. Other hand marketing will give up to date information about new products.
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 will help us to buy new products, One example, recently apple lunched new iPhone 11
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 is I got know while saw a publicity in the daily newspaper. In conclusion, after discussing both the views product companies are used advertisement is the key way to sell the products, I my view advertisement will tempt to buy things which are not really needed.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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