Many Students take part-time jobs while studying in university. Do you think it is a good or bad idea?

In
modern era
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the modern era
, living expenses are increasingly becoming exorbitant, especially for students. While some people are of opinion that part-time job plays a vital role in
student's
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a student's life
student's lives
the student's life
life
,
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
are opposed to it.
This
essay shall discuss
benefits
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the benefits
and drawbacks of part-time
work
while studying. A
traditional
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tradition
and common belief is that students should
only focus on in
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only focus on
their education. Even though the part-time
work
have monetary and other
benefits but
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benefits, but
it
also
leads to
tirredness
temporary loss of strength and energy resulting from hard physical or mental work
tiredness
at the same time which causes
huge distraction
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a huge distraction
in studies. To put in
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
words, part-time
work
and studies together leads to
stressful lifestyle
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a stressful lifestyle
stressful lifestyles
.
Furthermore
, it has generally been seen that, college days should be more enjoyable with basic
cautions
a positively charged ion
cations
.
Therefore
, due to
above
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the above
-mentioned disadvantages some people believe that part-time jobs degrades the
student
life
.
Conversely
, there are numerous positives of working part-time.
To begin
with, if the
student
is not
financial
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financially
strong, it makes them partial dependent and less burdensome on their family.
For instance
, majority number of international students manage their daily expenses
such
as food, groceries
,
Accept space
,
and travel expenses with their part-time income.
Moreover
, these students often become more confident with time and
tackles
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tackle
complex situation
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complex situations
gracefully. Though managing part-time
work
and studies together become very
hectic but
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hectic, but
this
lifestyle
teachs
impart skills or knowledge to
teaches
student
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students
the student
a greater lesson for
life
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.e.
time
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Time
management and value for money.
Hence
, due to
such
advantages part-time
work
should never be ignored by
stutents
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
students
,
infact
constituting the undiminished entirety; lacking nothing essential especially not damaged
intact
infarct
families must encourage their child to grab part-time opportunities of
work
. To conclude, there are few disadvantages of part-time
work
which leads to stressful
life but
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life, but
I
strong
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strongly
believe that there are enormous benefits which
cleary
without doubt or question
clearly
outwighs
be heavier than
outweighs
outweigh
the negatives of part-time
work
while studying.

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