Nowadays culture is much the same all around the world when compared to previous times. Do you think this a positive or negative development?
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ARE
VERY SIMILAR GLOBALLY IN Wrong verb form
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COMPARISM
TO THE OLDEN DAYS, WHICH IS Correct your spelling
COMPARISON
DUE TO
SERIES
OF EVENTS THAT IN MY OPINION Correct article usage
A SERIES
HAS
CAUSED MORE HARM THAN GOOD. ONE POINT TO CONSIDER IS IN ANCIENT TIMES THERE Correct subject-verb agreement
HAVE
WERE
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WAS
ALOT
OF FARMING WHICH ENABLED PEOPLE IN THE SOCIETY Correct your spelling
A LOT
HAVE
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TO HAVE
ACCES
TO FRESH FRUITS AND VEGETABLES. THEREBY, RAISING PLUMP AND HEALTHY Correct your spelling
ACCESS
OFFSPRINGS
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OFFSPRING
PRESNTLY
, ITS NOT THE CASE BECAUSE A VAST MAJORITY DEPEND ON IMPORTED INORGANIC SUPPLIES. ADMITTEDLY, FRESHLY GROWN FOODS Correct your spelling
CURRENTLY
HELPED
EVADE MANY DISEASES AND MAINTAIN LIVES, UNLIKE Wrong verb form
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THE
FOREIGN FOODS WHICH Correct article usage
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IS
ONE OF THE KNOWN CAUSES OF CANCER. Correct subject-verb agreement
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FOR EXAMPLE
, OUR FOREFATHERS MADE USE OF UNORTHODOX MEDICINE LIKE HERBS AND OILS FOR TREATMENT AND DURING SUCH
TIME THERE WERE LITTLE OR NO RECORDS OF CANCER AND OTHER DEBILITATING DISEASES. ANOTHER POINT TO CONSIDER IS THAT THE WESTERN CULTURE HAS A HUGE INFLUENCE ON YOUTHS NEGATIVELY THAT NOWADAYS THEY HOLD LOW REGARDS
FOR THEIR HISTORY. Fix the agreement mistake
REGARD
HOWEVER
, IT IS DUE TO
THE FACT THAT THEY WERE BORN IN THE MILLENIUM IN WHICH MOST OF THIS
ARTIFACTS WERE NOWHERE TO BE SEEN BECAUSE OF THE COLONIZATION WHICH LED TO THE Correct determiner usage
THESE
DESTROYING
OF MOST OF THE ARTIFACTS BY THE WESTERNERS. Replace the word
DESTRUCTION
THEREFORE
, GIVING THE PLACE A NEW LOOK. IN ADDITIONAL
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ADDITION
SUCH
NEW DEVELOPMENT BROUGHT WITH IT CHRISTIANITY AND THE TEACHES OF JESUS. CONSEQUENTLY
, MAKING TRADITIONAL BELIEF A THING OF THE PAST. FURTHERMORE
, EMBIBING OF NEW WAYS OF LIFE MADE NATIONS LOSE THEIR UNIQUENESS. IN CONCLUSION, SOME OF THE PROBLEMS THE
SOCIETY FACE LIKE POOR HEALTH, LACK OF HISTORICAL BUILDINGS AND MISPLACED IDENTITY ARE THE MANY DOWNSIDES BROUGHT ABOUT BY MODERNIZATION.Correct article usage
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion