Nowadays culture is much the same all around the world when compared to previous times. Do you think this a positive or negative development?

IN RECENT TIMES CUSTOMS
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VERY SIMILAR GLOBALLY IN
COMPARISM
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COMPARISON
TO THE OLDEN DAYS, WHICH IS
DUE TO
SERIES
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OF EVENTS THAT IN MY OPINION
HAS
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CAUSED MORE HARM THAN GOOD. ONE POINT TO CONSIDER IS IN ANCIENT TIMES THERE
WERE
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ALOT
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A LOT
OF FARMING WHICH ENABLED PEOPLE IN THE SOCIETY
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ACCES
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ACCESS
TO FRESH FRUITS AND VEGETABLES. THEREBY, RAISING PLUMP AND HEALTHY
OFFSPRINGS
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.
PRESNTLY
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CURRENTLY
, ITS NOT THE CASE BECAUSE A VAST MAJORITY DEPEND ON IMPORTED INORGANIC SUPPLIES. ADMITTEDLY, FRESHLY GROWN FOODS
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EVADE MANY DISEASES AND MAINTAIN LIVES, UNLIKE
THE
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FOREIGN FOODS WHICH
IS
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ONE OF THE KNOWN CAUSES OF CANCER.
FOR EXAMPLE
, OUR FOREFATHERS MADE USE OF UNORTHODOX MEDICINE LIKE HERBS AND OILS FOR TREATMENT AND DURING
SUCH
TIME THERE WERE LITTLE OR NO RECORDS OF CANCER AND OTHER DEBILITATING DISEASES. ANOTHER POINT TO CONSIDER IS THAT THE WESTERN CULTURE HAS A HUGE INFLUENCE ON YOUTHS NEGATIVELY THAT NOWADAYS THEY HOLD LOW
REGARDS
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FOR THEIR HISTORY.
HOWEVER
, IT IS
DUE TO
THE FACT THAT THEY WERE BORN IN THE MILLENIUM IN WHICH MOST OF
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ARTIFACTS WERE NOWHERE TO BE SEEN BECAUSE OF THE COLONIZATION WHICH LED TO THE
DESTROYING
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OF MOST OF THE ARTIFACTS BY THE WESTERNERS.
THEREFORE
, GIVING THE PLACE A NEW LOOK. IN
ADDITIONAL
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,
SUCH
NEW DEVELOPMENT BROUGHT WITH IT CHRISTIANITY AND THE TEACHES OF JESUS.
CONSEQUENTLY
, MAKING TRADITIONAL BELIEF A THING OF THE PAST.
FURTHERMORE
, EMBIBING OF NEW WAYS OF LIFE MADE NATIONS LOSE THEIR UNIQUENESS. IN CONCLUSION, SOME OF THE PROBLEMS
THE
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SOCIETY FACE LIKE POOR HEALTH, LACK OF HISTORICAL BUILDINGS AND MISPLACED IDENTITY ARE THE MANY DOWNSIDES BROUGHT ABOUT BY MODERNIZATION.
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