Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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It is said that money makes the world go round. We spend the majority of our waking hours at work - earning a living, providing for our families and saving for our retirement.

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money no doubt plays a critical role in determining the quality and nature of our lifestyles, in my opinion, the size of one’s paycheque is not a measure of one’s

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in life. The bases of my views are philosophical, social and personal. Philosophically,

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can be defined in myriad ways. For some,

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is an external concept to be measured in terms of

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income, huge bank balances, fancy cars, expensive mansions, luxurious holidays and so on.

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, in my view,

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is a reflection of internal human qualities,

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as compassion, kindness, honesty, understanding and more. By

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definition, the mere fact of earning a high income does not determine or define

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. Socially,

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depends on how we treat other human beings. Do we regard others with respect or do we impose our will on them? Are we mindful of their needs and desires or do we behave selfishly? Do we encourage and support our friends, family and communities or do we insist they only follow the path we think best? It is clear that a critical aspect of

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lies in the answers to

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the relationships

we share with our fellow human beings. Personally,

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can only be self-defined. My idea of

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may not be the same as another person’s vision.

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is as it should be. Each of us is a product of diverse social, cultural, economic, political, religious and ideological influences. When we add to that mix the free will that each of us exercises, we can understand clearly how each of us fashions his / her own aspirations for what we consider to be

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in our own lives. In conclusion,

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is a concept which can be interpreted in a million different ways.Each individual’s version adds to the richness of our world and makes our planet a more delightful, amazing and colourful place to live.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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355 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

subjective
fulfillment
personal happiness
contributions to society
volunteering
activism
personal achievements
academic accomplishments
mastering a skill
indicators of success
independent of monetary wealth
financial stability
monetary wealth
emotional well-being
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