People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and ilegal drugs, and at an early age, some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the cause and effects of widespread drug abuse by young people. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.

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a crucial function

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modern communities

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society yet

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society, yet

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, there are ample of reasons which leads to

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utilisation by teenagers

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bad peer group

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a bad peer group

stress

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, depression and

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addictive

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. In detail, youngster usually intake invalid medicine or initiate taking invalid medicine due to friends who are in the category of

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abuse

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, nowadays teenagers have more

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addiction in teenager is very common because of easy available drugs which directly

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of illegal products all and all it

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the whole economy of the province and major concerns for

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to control as well as making strict watch by the officials of police on

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addiction to avoid harsh conditions in

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, medication for

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clean and healthy. In summary, I want to restate that intake of valid drugs is

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harmful when it is taken in overdose and illegal drugs are more harmful there are several causes and effects explained which affects

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. So, regimes should take responsibility to avoid marketing of illegal drugs.

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